Thread in which Yonlu posts some of his songs, And no one cares Options

[Yoñlu]

This dumb classmate of mine attempted to write lyrics in English and I made a song out of them. It's 5:41 minutes long and makes no sense. Some feedback would be appreciated, as long as you bear in mind that my recording "apparatus" consists of a shitty mic and Cool Edit Pro, and that the song isn't serious(so basically, you can't criticize me at all (IMG:style_emoticons/default/tongue.gif) ). Those who decipher the backwards message that plays halfway through win nothing.
The song's called It's Not Another King Kong. Please excuse the demonic filesize.
Here are the lyrics:

The boy whith a TIGER
The boy whith the girl
The boy is gentle

In forest
The tiger was starving
And go to eat him
When he have a idea
Tu put the girl for the animal

The tiger was clever
And to raise she for
your his cage

she live in the cage
for ten years

and there the animal
don't let the girl leave


When the boy go
to the cage
and take the girl

She cry and cry
with a dangerous to return
a life
Whith a strange peoples.

Click here to download it (6666 KB)

This post has been edited by Yoñlu: May 24 2006, 01:09 AM

[FargalEX]

It's a thing of beauty.

[Orchid]

In a scary way it's a mix of the zootons, tool and some other scary stuff.
But I like it.

[Simmy]

Absolutely wonderful

In a scary way it's a mix of the zootons, tool and some other scary stuff.

Throw Eric Idles voice in there and you're sorted

[Orchid]

Deal.

[acidbearboy]

Quite bizarre, a nod or two to a couple of classics in there I think.
Wasn't it you that did the tune with the printer sounds? Can you still get it anywhere?

[Yoñlu]

Quite bizarre, a nod or two to a couple of classics in there I think.
Wasn't it you that did the tune with the printer sounds? Can you still get it anywhere?

Yeah, that was me. It's really sweet of you to remember that. You can download it here (2,07 MB).

[acidbearboy]

Cheers, it's not quite how I remember but I like it none the less. You should develop it, add some beats or melody into the mix. I like the rhythmic printing sounds though. Good stuff.

[SuperNashwan]

I like it, thanks for sharing. Always refreshing to not know where a song is heading next.

[roskelld]

Bloody ace, both tracks.

I hope you've done more, or are planning to.

[bastion]

Genius. More please (IMG:style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)

[Yoñlu]

Cheers, it's not quite how I remember but I like it none the less. You should develop it, add some beats or melody into the mix.

Well, back when I first posted it here, fellow forumite Sabrepulse of MySpace fame made a remix which adds precisely that. Here you go (1,18 MB).

Thanks for the compliments, guys. Today I came home thinking about suicide, but reading all these nice words made me postpone that. I do have more songs which I'll post later on, but none of them are quite as random as this one.

[FargalEX]

I do have more songs which I'll post later on, but none of them are quite as random as this one.

Guuurdenky?

[djondjayvadas]

that remix is ace, like fourtet when they're good. Love it.

Checking the other one out now

[djondjayvadas]

excellent (IMG:style_emoticons/default/biggrin.gif) :D

Yeah definitely put off suicide till you've given us a few more tracks.

(IMG:style_emoticons/default/wink.gif)

[Yoñlu]

Okay, here are three more:
Guuurdensky Slipslogruya-Q (1,63 MB)
This is basically me narrating a story written by FargalEX over some cheesy FruityLoopness. An early effort.

I Know What It's Like (3,4 MB)
This one is very popular among my classmates, including my ex-future-girlfriend. Granted, it's my most listener-friendly outing. I basically took an expression often heard in angsty teenager songs nowadays, "you don't know what it's like", as a catchphrase to rant about my problems in a light-hearted fashion. Perhaps the song's success can be attributed to that too.

Lampião (3,97 KB -- it's a MIDI)
Abandoned attempt at a more "serious" approach to songwriting. Back when I studied music, my homework would often be to write a song in a scale chosen by the teacher. This was one of those occasions. I was assigned the task of writing a song in F Major. So I sat down and chose a chord to start my song with: Bb7. I also decided I was gonna write the song directly into the sheet as I made it up, using Mozart 2005. When I showed the sheet to my teacher, he told me the song was not in F Major, it was in B myxolydian(or something). The reason I'm posting this less than half of a song here is because feedback on it would be even more welcome than on my other songs, which are 50% piss-taking.

Sorry for the extend post, I got a bit carried-away. I'll check this thread again prior to defenestrating my Self.

[Droo]

Ace, ace and thrice ace.

Where abouts are you from? Did i hear a twinge of Norn Iron at the start of the first song?

[flicky]

Marry me.

[FargalEX]

Where abouts are you from?

Gay Harbour.

[Orchid]

Marry me.

That I know what it's like song is (IMG:style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)